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we love like we sin, terrified and breathless.

we are tea-at-midnight girls, naming constellations
that don't exist after lost tourists we meet on the
street, reminding our freckle covered shoulders
that even beautiful things can be made ordinary.

we are broken fingers and half-closed eyelids and a
penchant for mischief. we are ribbon skin and frantic
desires and incandescent hope. we are a voice spilling
secrets to falling leaves diving after their arachnid brothers,

mimicking the millions before us who were
judged unfairly, unjustly but all too correctly.

we whisper promises to dandelions because they do not
know how to hold grudges and we refuse to die because
the world can not stand the sight of our scars and
cloud-colored eyes filled with a malady called freedom.

we are believers and dreamers and scared to death but we
are not done yet. we are dusty library windows and thunder
raking through bones and leaving eyes glowing, skin shaking,
burning whispers of 'I'm sorry, but this is me. This is just

me.'

we are not victims, we are survivors,

and you'll be praying for death by tomorrow morning.
full title: and we found that, together, we could never breathe

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Thank you everybody for the favorites and the comments! I'm honored and pleased to have gotten a DD. I never thought my writing would really touch someone but it seems like I was wrong. Again, thank you so much.
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Given 2009-09-14
A truly imaginative offering, ~SmileforSomeone's and we found... easily takes what seems ordinary and turns it into something quite extraordinary. ( Suggested by Gir-Gir and Featured by LadyLincoln )
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HastyMage Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm crying. Good job, it's take real skill to make be cry. It's so beautiful. Thank you. :)
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JackieRB2007 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011
that's amazing.
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Poisonedkitty Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2011
This is something. This is something special.
(:
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:iconsmileforsomeone:
SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2011
Thank you. :heart:
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:iconwastlandgirl:
wastlandgirl Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
this is so delisously sad.although it makes me so sad i cant keep my eyes of ever word u write.
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swehboi Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010
beautiful :)
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:iconcherri13:
Cherri13 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2010
this is an excellent piece....i see a lot of myself in this...thank you...
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:iconchaseouttheshadows:
chaseouttheshadows Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
one of my favourite poems,makes me shiver everytime ^_^

utterly fantastic
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2010
Thank you so much!
It seems to be liked by everyone. C:
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Blessfullyshocked Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
"we are dusty library windows and thunder
raking through bones and leaving eyes glowing, skin shaking,
burning whispers of 'I'm sorry, but this is me. This is just

me.' "

favorite line,
beautiful.
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2010
That's my favorite as well.
Thank you.
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Blessfullyshocked Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome.
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Endless-RainBow Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, I cried. Thank you.
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Dinru Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
I'm not sure if I've already commented this, but I love it. "Even beautiful things can be made ordinary" and, apparently, even ordinary things can be made beautiful :) Kudos.
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2009
Thank you. C:
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irathray Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, this was beautiful. There are many things I like about this piece of writing...but imagery is the tops. :+favlove: I feel the need to parade this around and show everyone.
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2009
Haha, that's what I did with my friends. I was just like, "Look how awesome I apparently am."
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irathray Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
As you should have! :) I really enjoyed it.
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karithelover Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2009   Writer
i love this one so much^^
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2009
Thank you.
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karithelover Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2009   Writer
welcomeness^^
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kindred Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
It's been a very long time since i've actually read anything worth reading on DA. I'm glad that I found this, as it is truly one of the more interesting pieces to have been posted a long while. You do indeed paint with your words, which, as it so happens, is a lost art around here.

Very nicely done. You most certainly deserve the DD.
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2009
Thank you. C:
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DrunkenGrease Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009
Powerful. Infinitely so. Awesome work.
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:iconsmileforsomeone:
SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009
Thank you so much!
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pencilfold Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009   Writer
"mimicking the millions before us who were
judged unfairly, unjustly but all too correctly."

is pure genius.
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009
Thank you.

I actually came up with it while hiding from my parents in a thorn bush.
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pencilfold Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009   Writer
Wow.
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this was...stunning. there really is no other word for what you've created here.
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:iconsmileforsomeone:
SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009
Thank you.
I love how you said 'created' instead of just something like 'wrote'.
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:iconthefireflyliberation:
writing is creating :heart: it's just as much creation as making a piece of jewelry or a sculpture.
and you're most obviously an artist.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009  Student Writer
very tasty - a good DD!
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009
I'm definitely going to go up to my friend and be like:
'Remember that poem I wrote you? It's delicious!'

Thank you. C:
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009  Student Writer
That will be a sweet moment! And a well deserved one :)
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GemiDonnie Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009
Wow.
*clicks fave button*
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009
Thank you.
Your avatar made me giggle.
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GemiDonnie Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009
Thanks? XD
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Otacon144 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009  Student Filmographer
Hn... I'll need some time to think about this before I can give any really relevant comment.
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009
Haha, take your time.
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Otacon144 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2009  Student Filmographer
"Reminding our freckle-covered shoulders that even beautiful things can be made ordinary."

This line stood out to me. I read it at first, and thought you were saying that the beauty can be taken out of anything.

But then it hit me a second later - it means just the opposite. A girl with freckled shoulders can still be beautiful.

Everything is, can be, and always was beautiful - but it only looks ordinary to a cynical eye.

Is that what you had in mind?

Very moving. :)
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2009
Why yes it is. Thank you.
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dulcetDebauchery Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009
and you'll be praying for death by tomorrow morning.
very nice line,
good use of imagery too,
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009
Thank you.
I wasn't sure if it fit at first but I loved it as part of the poem.
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freefall127 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009
good god, this is like a shot of hard liquor on an empty stomach. i feel so ready to self destruct. thank you, thank you.
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009
'I feel so ready to self destruct.'=AMAZING.
Thank you.
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EDBunny Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009
This is amazing. I often have the same mix of revelations and observational detailing in mind. Wondrous, I can't set it to paper, this is great. :)
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009
Thank you!
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EDBunny Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2009
Sure :)
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Uranus-seventhsun Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009  Hobbyist
You string words like a spider its web.
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SmileforSomeone Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009
Wow, amazing.
Thank you.
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